Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 09:09 pm · For: Chapter 5
Ok, first of all I'm so glad Lily reacted the way she did. You had me kind of worried at the end of the last chapter.
So happy that Natalie is ok. Her relationship with Luke is going to be even better now.
So Josh is gay? THAT'S why he didn't feel the same way about her! gotcha!
Cute scene with Nicky. Just brings it home how deprived his life was before. Poor kid didn't even know what a swing was!
And I loved that last scene. A lot of love there, and yep he probably got lucky! LOL
Of course Lily would understand Luke's reaction... she knows her son well. And in the end Natalie is okay and all is well. This introduces Josh into the mix too...
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 08:55 pm · For: Chapter 4
OMG Luke! He has to be dying inside! To remember having an accident involving your sister and then shutting down to the point that you aren't even capable of looking for her.
I'm so glad he has Noah to take care of him. The scene in the tub was very moving. A lot of love there.
That was a tough scene between Holden, Luke and Noah. None of them really know how to react, and everyone is hurting.
Lily, please PLEASE don't pull away from him. He needs you!
Great job, SJB!
Thanks buttercup. All a little horrific at the moment. I like how Noah handles things in this one. He's really strong and takes such good care of Luke even though he's also worried for Natalie.
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 03:36 pm · For: Chapter 3
WHAT????? He can't be saying it was him who hit her! How??
OMG poor Luke is going through hell! And Noah has to be worried sick. I just feel so sorry for both of them having to go through this, but at least they have each other. And then you have Noah's love for Natalie. He is just amazing. They both are.
But Luke saying it was him? Just Wow!
You know I like to create that shock, surprise cliffhanger! LOL! Eventually you'll catch up and then start to hate me for it... everybody else does... I've been called evil on more than a few occasions and have left the end of Young Minds on one too... *evil laugh*
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 03:20 pm · For: Chapter 2
Yep, she was being a typical teenager who thought she was in love, even though the boy didn't feel the same way she did. I think we all go through that stage, maybe not to this extreme, but to a certain degree. And like Noah said, she kind of reminds me of a younger Luke. He could be a hothead at times too!
So not only did she steal his bike, but she stole his car too? Jeepers!
Nat definitely has Luke's determination to get her own way. :-) I liked the idea of her being a mini-Luke and Luke having to deal with a personality so like his own... giving him a taste of his own medicine in a way...
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 03:05 pm · For: Chapter 1
Oh no! Natalie?
No wonder Luke was having such a hard time. He always had special bonds with all his siblings on the show. Poor Luke!
So she's got a boyfriend now? Long distance relationship too? Wow! Little Miss Natalie has grown up!
Hope she's ok.
This chapter was a mix 'n match to get to the final cliffhanger... and I loved the idea that Noah noticed the bike but still didn't really click until he realised Nat was missing.
Name: sgrove (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 08:42 pm · For: Chapter 5
Just when i think I got the story figured out....you blind side me...
Yip... I love to baffle and/or shock the reader a bit... :-)
Name: daan73 (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2011 02:22 pm · For: Chapter 5
wow this kind of spooked me big time i was really really scared of what happened
great twist though
but i am so pleased that everything turned out good!
off to the next it is :)
I know... I wanted to do something that the reader would NEVER expect... I thought this would be interesting to write... Thanks again for the comments!
Name: Sidd (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2011 10:28 pm · For: Chapter 5
OMG I didnt think this would be an ending chapter... but it really ended well. So unexpected!!
I loved this part! Cant wait for your next series!!
Thanks Sidd! I thought I'd surprise everyone at the end... LOL!
Name: Lukoah (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2011 12:04 pm · For: Chapter 5
Amazing! Just perfect... well, maybe not for Natalie (lol), but that doesn't matter; she's alive! And Nuke are closer than ever... You just made my weekend! Can't wait for part P!
LOL! Yes I guess Nat didn't get what she wanted, but then like most teenagers she was more concerned that Josh wasn't interested because she might be ugly... so to find out it's because he's gay... suddenly life is okay again and she'll move on!
Name: pomeroy (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2011 07:33 am · For: Chapter 5
Wow, this story was really intense...again ;)
Loved every bit!
...next installment...yeeaaahhhhh...can't wait...
Thanks! :) Next one is taking a little longer but it will come... You're support is amazing! Thanks so much!
Name: glori572 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 05:25 pm · For: Chapter 5
okay, you must have used a defibulator to revive me, cause damn, i'm alive!!! loved this chapter, was so happy that lily didn't hold anything against luke, that was so beautiful and touching. but, had to stop myself from rolling on the floor with laughter at Josh's admission. i figured when he started thinking about his feelings, that maybe he was gay, but the fact that he sat there with the family and didn't even notice was hilarious. if i'd been at home i would have just laughed till i fell on the ground. i was in my car reading on the phone, in the parking lot of my job, where i was the only one left, cause i couldn't stop reading, and i'm sure i looked like a nut, bouncing up and down in happiness. i knew you wouldn't let me down.
so know we have to wait for the next one. what could you possible thorw at the boys next, the earth splitting up in front of them, each on a differnt side of the chasham that seperates them. the boys having to endure hardships as they search for one another ;} okay, maybe not that, but i'm sure you're going to make me cry. now wether those will be happy tears of angsty tears is up to you ;}
Oh my! I was the one rolling on the floor after reading this! You really know how to make my day with your comments! This was brilliant! Thanks so much... I'm glad you enjoyed the last chapter of Natalie! I thought it would be fun to really lighten things up after the first few chapters...
Name: sln188 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 05:19 pm · For: Chapter 5
I was really worried about Luke through this one. So glad Natalie pulled through and enjoyed her reaction to Josh's confession. It seemed so natural. Of course, Nuke junkie that I am, I really loved the last scene with them in the park. This segment of the series was well written with suspense, emotion and a great ending. Can't wait for the next one!
I couldn't resist having Josh, shy to come out to his friend, express himself under these conditions... And you know I like to end all my stories on a somewhat happy note... Thanks so much for the comment!
Name: van-lukefan (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 04:56 pm · For: Chapter 5
Just read the last 2 CH. You had me a little worried there! So glad Nat's ok and the part about Josh was great!! Can't wait for the next LA story! Really you just keep writting this series and I'll keep comming back! THANK YOU FOR A GREAT READ!
Thank you for reading! I can't really express what it means to me that there are so many people out there that like what I write... It makes doing it so worthwhile
Name: ficnic (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 04:16 pm · For: Chapter 5
Oh wow. This was INCREDIBLE! Just amazing. As usual, I don't even have the words. Just know I loved it a LOT.
I am glad Natalie survived and recovered! I knew Luke's parents would forgive him, but I don't know that he would have forgived himself! I'm sure he is still struggling with that even though Natalie is fine. Thank goodness he has Noah to help him through.
Again, this was just fantastic. Can't wait for your next effort in the series!
I think Luke will have a lot to work through after this... but we know Noah is there to help him... so he'll be fine! I thought you might like a light and happy ending to this rather dark and intense story! Thanks!
Name: laurashale (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 02:45 pm · For: Chapter 5
thank god, i really could not see it all turning out well but i'm so glad it seems to be x
Thanks Laura! Yes I thought I'd just throw the happy chapter in there... so that it comes as a bit of a shock... Thanks for the comment!
Name: jberri79 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 01:25 pm · For: Chapter 5
I really enjoyed this. So happy Nat's not dead, love the build up and the scenes between Lily and Luke and Nat and Josh.
There were many moments he’d known with Noah that he’d wished he could parcel in a box and keep for life, opening it up to look at them whenever he wanted. This was one of them. Moments like these when they felt so perfectly aligned.
This part with Nuke so beautiful.
Love this series, can't wait for more.
I thought we needed a night light and sunny chapter to end on... Thanks for another great comment!
Name: pwalla (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 01:01 pm · For: Chapter 5
Thank you! I've had the crappiest week and this chapter put a smile on my face. Thank you for the happy ending. You never let me down. You are quickly becoming one of my must read favorites!
AWE! I'm so glad this made you happy for the day. And I'm totally honoured by your comment! Thanks so much!
Name: tammynelson78 (Signed) · Date: February 23, 2011 11:44 am · For: Chapter 4
Oh man, oh man!!! Poor Luke for actually running over his sister but also poor Noah who has to deal with a almost canatonic Luke...and wanting to protect him/help him and at a loss on how to do it.
I can't figure out if Natalie is dead or not from the chapters. I hope she isn't, they don't need that tragic drama in their lives.
Hi Tammy! Real life is in the way at the moment so the next chapter is taking a while! I'll get it up as soon as possible, okay! Then you will have some more answers! Of course I'm not going to tell you! :-)
Name: glori572 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 06:21 pm · For: Chapter 4
okay, i've got the toe tag ready. you just fully and totally killed me dead with this chapter. why, oh why must you do this to the boys when they were on their way to being happy ;[ okay, a bit melodramatic, but i just finished reading, and my emotions are a bit wound tight. okay, i'm a bit high strung, but that's okay, i make these reviews fun. okay, i'm giving you another chance (as if i would actually stop reading), and i'm going to wait for your next posting. now, if you make me keel over and die, i'll have to come back and haunt you. yes, i don't know where you are, but as a ghost i think i could manage to find you ;] alright, enough with the drama queenout, i really love this series and have actually gone all the way back to the begining, and i have to say, it is as great reread as it was the first time. can't wait for more. remember, you can save a life here; mine ;}
OMG! What a huge compliment that you went back and read this all over again! I can't believe it! Thanks so much! Also, I try very hard not to kill my readers... just keep them on the edge of death... LOL! And I LOVE the DRAMA QUEEN - bring it on! This really made me smile!
Name: tammynelson78 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 10:35 am · For: Chapter 4
Is Natalie dead? I keep rereading the chapters and can't find the outcome.
Another one?! LOL! You really want to know... don't you? But I'm not going to tell you... :-)
Name: Lukoah (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 09:48 am · For: Chapter 4
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!!! This is the only word that comes in my mind... Are you studying psycho? because, really, sincerely, the way you describe Luke, his thoughts, the way he feels, it is just AMAZING! I hope Lily won't be too hard on Luke... he really needs both his parents to stand up by him... I know he's got Noah, but his parents are so important to him... he needs them!
Can't wait for the next chapter to be posted :)
Actually I did study Psychology a few years back (okay alot of years back - but who's counting anyway!) This is a lovely comment and I'm really touched that you seem to enjoy these stories so much. I'm sorry for the slow upload of the next chapter but real life is in the way at the moment and I'm working late hours... I will try to bet it up tomorrow...
Name: jberri79 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 09:10 am · For: Chapter 4
I had a feeling you were taking it there, that somehow it was Luke who hit her. But I'm hoping that maybe it ain't true.
That little scene between Holden and Noah so heartbreaking.
Great chapter, can't wait for more.
I know... a little (okay a lot) sad this one... But I have to write the stories as they come to me... I'm glad you are still enjoying it!
Name: pomeroy (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 09:00 am · For: Chapter 4
This is so horrible. God, the situation Luke is in, could very well drive someone crazy.
I still hope though that Natalie isn't dead, and will be alright.
Great chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
Thanks! The next one is taking it's time to be written I'm afraid... I'm in the middle of an office move and I'm only 1 of 6 original staff and all the rest (about 30) are brand new! So you see my problem! Late work nights really eat into the writing time! I hope to get it up soon! Thanks for another great comment!
Name: laurashale (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 06:26 am · For: Chapter 4
Oh god, how will luke cope with this he loves his family more than anthing - please tell us that natalie is still alive and is just in hospital or something. I have faith that it will end well - fingers crossed xx
Ahhh Laurashale! I've made you sad :-( Hopefully we can cheer things up again soon! Thanks for the comment! :-)
Name: ficnic (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 06:11 am · For: Chapter 4
I kind of suspected this after the end of the last chapter, and with Luke being SO completely messed up. What an amazing, sad story. And still we have no idea if Natalie lived!
I love how you're telling this, and look forward to the next part!
It is sad... but it's one of these stories demanding to be written! Thanks! :-)